衝撃の事実 / A Shocking Revelation
あの、ヨウ先輩にキャノ先輩。
それに、フワッフ先生。ちょっといいすか？
Yoh, Cannie. You too, Professor Fwuff. Can I tell you something?
The Japanese one has all 3 honorifics together “Yoh-senpai”, “Kyano-senpai”, and “Fuwuffu-sensei”. So it gives a high sense of seriousness and respectfulness.
The English one packs less punch, and also the Mr. Fwuff that was used frequently changed to professor?
俺は、もっとグルーヴコースターをしたい！
だからこの部に入部させてください！
I wanna keep playing Groove Coaster! So please let me join for real!
……な！
...I'll be!
In the Japanese text, the single “na” from Yoh sounds like he’s both surprised and relieved that Kakeru joined. The English one sounds like he was already expecting it.
や……
...
やったー！！
やったよ、ぶちょー！！
Oh yeah! We did it, Captain!
This felt like Canon was teary-eyed when I read it in Japanese for the first time, despite the graphic having no such variation. The “ya…” in the prior text box and the follow-up “yattaー!” make it good. The translated “Oh yeah!” doesn’t really compare to how emotional she is.
ああ……！ 今まではどれだけ勧誘しても入部してもらえなかったが、
まさかこの土壇場で入部してもらえるとは……！
That we have! Despite all my past recruiting efforts, not a soul would join our club. Who would've thought we'd find a new member at the eleventh hour?!
And here, the “aa…!” in the original sounds much more relieved than the English version. The dots are good. English removes both dots.
うんうん！
一緒にこの部を盛り上げていこうね！
Yeah! Let's amp up the energy of Groove Coaster Club together!
English can’t really do the “un un!” either, which sounds more emotional than “Yeah!“.
グルーヴ杯に出場できる！
成績次第では……。
And we can enter the Groove Cup! Well, depending on our results in the lead up, of course...
廃部を免れるかもしれない！
We might just save our club from disbandment!
え、ええ！ 廃部！？
Say what?! Disbandment?!
Like bukatsu 部活 (club activities), haibu 廃部 (club disbandment) is also a specific kanji compound with bu 部 (club) built into it. So when the English text talks about disbandment, in Japanese it is specifically club disbandment.